| The bad poetry thread by Chrissy | |
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| Subject: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Mon Jul 14, 2014 7:16 pm | |
| BloomersRiding high The ever lasting waste line Always faithful Never in the behind Some people laugh As they dig for their little string Time after time You're right where yore supposed to be
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| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Tue Jul 15, 2014 7:00 am | |
| THE DARK ROT
Dirty little secrets rotting in your heart Dirty little secrets putrid from the start
Made from lies for alibis Rots your flesh for a fly's feast gorged
Dirty little secrets no where to hide Dirty little secrets Steal your life
The end.
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Tue Jul 15, 2014 7:10 am | |
| A BEAUTIFUL PERSON
Your open arms engulf me they lay. with resting grace on my shoulders Sun on your face.. captures the light like a thief Beauty no bounds, I see your soul A smile like heaven removing all fear A voice so calm No pain here You are my friend a confidante The minds gentle wind blows... .Peace because of you A beautiful person
The end
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| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Sat Jul 19, 2014 8:30 am | |
| The lines on my face can no longer be ignored But they do not match the pain of ages wisdom That lies in my heart have learned the truth That honesty is a lie And integrity is just a word In this world we must continue Till the end
Cherished moments Bring fleeting smiles Only to be washed with tears An agonizing fable of hope Dangled like the rope that will hang us In the end
Struggling to seize the day Filling empty spaces With laughs, with tears All the things we won't take from here We did our best It all gets laid to rest In the end
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| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Sat Jul 19, 2014 12:37 pm | |
| Win will I
strong is mind my
me on strife some lay to tried you
above rose heart my but
now heals it and
love with
spirit
The end |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Sat Jul 19, 2014 12:57 pm | |
| You're Love
Beautiful You To Want Me
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| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Thu Jul 24, 2014 8:33 pm | |
| Good night oh weary eyed hornet flittering away all day upon your scorn little perch settle in a simpler place find a petal suckle to thy face curl your tail a swivel of pointed art kick thy feet A slumber sleep arrives
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Joanimaroni
Posts : 1157 Join date : 2012-07-31
| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Thu Jul 24, 2014 8:38 pm | |
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| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Fri Jul 25, 2014 7:52 am | |
| - Joanimaroni wrote:
- Nice....
Thanks I take it you like the one I just wrote, hornet? |
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Melissa Admin
Posts : 1324 Join date : 2012-07-30 Location : A wild garden
| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Sat Jul 26, 2014 8:08 am | |
| Whoooaaa...this is heavy, Tree:
"That lies in my heart have learned the truth That honesty is a lie And integrity is just a word."
I like it.
Maybe (just maybe) I'll dig out some of the poems I wrote in the past. I don't know if I gave up on poetry or poetry gave up on me. I stopped writing it when I left college to go to nursing school. :-( | |
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Melissa Admin
Posts : 1324 Join date : 2012-07-30 Location : A wild garden
| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Sat Jul 26, 2014 8:11 am | |
| Wish we could get Yella on here. He writes some great poems and short stories. | |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Sat Jul 26, 2014 8:56 am | |
| - Melissa wrote:
- Wish we could get Yella on here. He writes some great poems and short stories.
Go ask him. |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Sat Jul 26, 2014 6:50 pm | |
| The war is over Lives wasted, many injuries tasted Some gone, some just forgotten Scars healed picking up the pieces To find life again Ourselves without war stepping out of the shadows To go home That unfamiliar place Where war has left a empty standing on the sidelines of fire making no contribution to the wind but to go home home The self before war |
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Melissa Admin
Posts : 1324 Join date : 2012-07-30 Location : A wild garden
| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Sun Jul 27, 2014 8:43 am | |
| - *~Tree~* wrote:
- The war is over
Lives wasted, many injuries tasted Some gone, some just forgotten Scars healed picking up the pieces To find life again Ourselves without war stepping out of the shadows To go home That unfamiliar place Where war has left a empty standing on the sidelines of fire making no contribution to the wind but to go home home The self before war Good! Sounds like an ode to PTSD. | |
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| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Sun Jul 27, 2014 11:13 am | |
| - Melissa wrote:
- *~Tree~* wrote:
- The war is over
Lives wasted, many injuries tasted Some gone, some just forgotten Scars healed picking up the pieces To find life again Ourselves without war stepping out of the shadows To go home That unfamiliar place Where war has left a empty standing on the sidelines of fire making no contribution to the wind but to go home home The self before war Good! Sounds like an ode to PTSD.
Its not what I was thinking at the time. But poetry is whatever the reader takes from it, so it could be. It wasn't my thought at the time, but that means nothing. |
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| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Thu Aug 14, 2014 8:43 pm | |
| Good Night Loretta May your socks stay dry and your tears be few Good night sweet friend tomorrows night is just todays long end
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Surfnrg
Posts : 432 Join date : 2013-02-04
| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Thu Aug 14, 2014 9:10 pm | |
| - *~Tree~* wrote:
- Good night oh weary eyed hornet
flittering away all day upon your scorn little perch settle in a simpler place find a petal suckle to thy face curl your tail a swivel of pointed art kick thy feet A slumber sleep arrives
Write more like this one..... | |
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| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Fri Aug 15, 2014 2:43 pm | |
| - Surfnrg wrote:
- *~Tree~* wrote:
- Good night oh weary eyed hornet
flittering away all day upon your scorn little perch settle in a simpler place find a petal suckle to thy face curl your tail a swivel of pointed art kick thy feet A slumber sleep arrives
Write more like this one..... Surfnrg, it is SO good to see you. It's been a while. Hope all is well with you. Thank you for the tip. I will do my best. But to be honest it is like this. A million arrows to the wind, one will hit. Much Love https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pco91kroVgQ |
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Surfnrg
Posts : 432 Join date : 2013-02-04
| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Fri Aug 15, 2014 3:14 pm | |
| Thanks Chrissy!
Do you ever use punctuation?
I really like this poem about a very simple image. i work a lot on paring Words out. If this makes sense? | |
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| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Fri Aug 15, 2014 3:35 pm | |
| - Surfnrg wrote:
- Thanks Chrissy!
Do you ever use punctuation?
I really like this poem about a very simple image. i work a lot on paring Words out. If this makes sense? Honestly, I rarely use punctuation, unless im at work I prefer to use decorative letters as if painting a picture with words/letters. I havnt done one of those that anyone cared about to my knowledge, but its my preference. Doing it online with these settings can be challenging. I like to write poems in a duo forms to where if read one way has one meaning and the other way has another. I'm not sure if anyone has ever picked up on that, because Ive only written a few of those over the years. I should call them tangles. But like I said, poetry had escaped me for years when I felt like writing it. Its been a while since I have, and I am grateful its slowly coming back. The desire that is. When I wrote "hornet" it was like a spirit had come over me and given me a gift. When I try, eh not so good. And I even know it but I still toss it out there because it is a thought to me that I may or may not go back to. Scribbles on a page friend BTW. it is a honor for me that you like one of my poems. That means so much to me. Thank you for expressing it. |
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Surfnrg
Posts : 432 Join date : 2013-02-04
| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Sat Aug 16, 2014 6:43 am | |
| Yes Chrissy painting a picture with words is what poetry is. Creating an image on paper from what you "see". I have never really tried to do a "tangle" as you word it but sometimes it just happens. In ode to a Grecian Urn Keats is simply describing an urn but clearly sees something else in the picture on it. Here is where it gets really hard: it is in polishing the poem which starts out like a rough diamond. Going back after writing it and editing upon editing to make sure it is just the way it should be. That always takes a great deal longer than it did to write the original lines..... | |
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Surfnrg
Posts : 432 Join date : 2013-02-04
| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Sat Aug 16, 2014 6:47 am | |
| Punctuation is like the gas pedal on a car. With it you can accelerate or slow down or even stop the reader exactly where you want. I have one poem i worked on the punctuation for almost a year after the poem was "finished". Of course it wasn't finished until all the commas and periods were put in. Punctuation also changes the meaning as you want. This is just my opinion as poetry is very personal. | |
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| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Sat Aug 16, 2014 8:19 am | |
| - Surfnrg wrote:
- Punctuation is like the gas pedal on a car. With it you can accelerate or slow down or even stop the reader exactly where you want. I have one poem i worked on the punctuation for almost a year after the poem was "finished". Of course it wasn't finished until all the commas and periods were put in. Punctuation also changes the meaning as you want. This is just my opinion as poetry is very personal.
I have occasionally used a period or comma. Not often. I think I have only one poem on here that I used a extended period for pause.......... I guess I'm guilty of not appreciating the English language that I am using to create thee little bits of word art. English has never been my strong point. I know Yella always tried to get me to use a thesauruses to get me to expand my vocabulary. I did that a few years ago and enjoyed the results. That was way back, shoot we might have all still been on the PNJ back then. Although he had asked me to again recently. I should listen to you both, about the punctuation and vocabulary. I appreciate you taking the time to offer me some tips. My next poem I will employ both those tools and see. |
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| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Sat Aug 16, 2014 8:57 am | |
| Lilliputian Diamonds Shifting under feet... The aroma of salt drawn within, wind to face, sun sinking in. pommeling little pebbles of water, gyrate on oily flesh. Tantalizing the soul Gush........ To dive in....... Penetrating todays fatigue Released passion of salty sea.
Lilliputian Diamonds, Linger at my feet. Grainy as the days end, of memories, oceans deep.
OK, here's a try Surfnrg, also Yella if he is around. |
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| Subject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy Thu Aug 21, 2014 8:38 pm | |
| Purple little bubble Floating by and by Stick my finger on you Poping in my eye Squiggly little smiles Darting to the sky |
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