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PostSubject: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Mon Jul 14, 2014 8:16 pm

Bloomers

Riding high
The ever lasting waste line
Always faithful
Never in the behind
Some people laugh
As they dig for their little string
Time after time
You're right where yore supposed to be

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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Tue Jul 15, 2014 8:00 am

THE DARK ROT

Dirty little secrets
rotting in your heart
Dirty little secrets
putrid from the start

Made from lies for alibis
Rots your flesh
for a fly's feast
gorged

Dirty little secrets
no where to hide
Dirty little secrets
Steal your life

The end.
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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Tue Jul 15, 2014 8:10 am

A BEAUTIFUL PERSON

Your open arms engulf me
they lay. with resting grace on my shoulders
Sun on your face.. captures the light like a thief
Beauty no bounds, I see your soul
A smile like heaven
removing all fear
A voice so calm
No pain here
You are my friend
a confidante
The minds gentle wind
blows...
.Peace because of you
A beautiful person

The end
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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Sat Jul 19, 2014 9:30 am

The lines on my face can no longer be ignored
But they do not match the pain of ages wisdom
That lies in my heart have learned the truth
That honesty is a lie
And integrity is just a word
In this world we must continue
Till the end

Cherished moments
Bring fleeting smiles
Only to be washed with tears
An agonizing fable of hope
Dangled like the rope that will hang us
In the end

Struggling to seize the day
Filling empty spaces
With laughs, with tears
All the things we won't take from here
We did our best
It all gets laid to rest
In the end

The end
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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Sat Jul 19, 2014 1:37 pm

Win will I

strong is mind my

me on strife some lay to tried you

above rose heart my but

now heals it and

love with

spirit

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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Sat Jul 19, 2014 1:57 pm

You're Love

          Beautiful You

                      To Want

                  Me

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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Thu Jul 24, 2014 9:33 pm

Good night oh weary eyed hornet
flittering away all day upon your scorn little perch
settle in a simpler place
find a petal
suckle to thy face
curl your tail
a swivel of pointed art
kick thy feet
A slumber sleep
arrives

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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Thu Jul 24, 2014 9:38 pm

Nice....
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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Fri Jul 25, 2014 8:52 am

Joanimaroni wrote:
Nice....

Thanks  Smile 

I take it you like the one I just wrote, hornet?

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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Sat Jul 26, 2014 9:08 am

Whoooaaa...this is heavy, Tree:

"That lies in my heart have learned the truth
That honesty is a lie
And integrity is just a word."


I like it.

Maybe (just maybe) I'll dig out some of the poems I wrote in the past. I don't know if I gave up on poetry or poetry gave up on me. I stopped writing it when I left college to go to nursing school. :-(
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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Sat Jul 26, 2014 9:11 am

Wish we could get Yella on here. He writes some great poems and short stories.
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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Sat Jul 26, 2014 9:56 am

Melissa wrote:
Wish we could get Yella on here. He writes some great poems and short stories.

Go ask him.  Smile 
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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Sat Jul 26, 2014 7:50 pm

The war is over
Lives wasted, many injuries tasted
Some gone, some just forgotten
Scars healed picking up the pieces
To find life again
Ourselves without war
stepping out of the shadows
To go home
That unfamiliar place
Where war has left a empty
standing on the sidelines
of fire
making no contribution to the wind
but to go home
home
The self before war
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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Sun Jul 27, 2014 9:43 am

*~Tree~* wrote:
The war is over
Lives wasted, many injuries tasted
Some gone, some just forgotten
Scars healed picking up the pieces
To find life again
Ourselves without war
stepping out of the shadows
To go home
That unfamiliar place
Where war has left a empty
standing on the sidelines
of fire
making no contribution to the wind
but to go home
home
The self before war

Good! Sounds like an ode to PTSD.  Sad 
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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Sun Jul 27, 2014 12:13 pm

Melissa wrote:
*~Tree~* wrote:
The war is over
Lives wasted, many injuries tasted
Some gone, some just forgotten
Scars healed picking up the pieces
To find life again
Ourselves without war
stepping out of the shadows
To go home
That unfamiliar place
Where war has left a empty
standing on the sidelines
of fire
making no contribution to the wind
but to go home
home
The self before war

Good! Sounds like an ode to PTSD.   Sad 

Its not what I was thinking at the time.

But poetry is whatever the reader takes from it, so it could be. It wasn't my thought at the time, but that means nothing.

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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Thu Aug 14, 2014 9:43 pm

Good Night Loretta
May your socks stay dry
and your tears be few
Good night sweet friend
tomorrows night
is just todays long end
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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Thu Aug 14, 2014 10:10 pm

*~Tree~* wrote:
Good night oh weary eyed hornet
flittering away all day upon your scorn little perch
settle in a simpler place
find a petal
suckle to thy face
curl your tail
a swivel of pointed art
kick thy feet
A slumber sleep
arrives


Write more like this one.....
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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Fri Aug 15, 2014 3:43 pm

Surfnrg wrote:
*~Tree~* wrote:
Good night oh weary eyed hornet
flittering away all day upon your scorn little perch
settle in a simpler place
find a petal
suckle to thy face
curl your tail
a swivel of pointed art
kick thy feet
A slumber sleep
arrives


Write more like this one.....

Surfnrg, it is SO good to see you. It's been a while. Hope all is well with you. Thank you for the tip. I will do my best. But to be honest it is like this. A million arrows to the wind, one will hit.  bom 

Much Love
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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Fri Aug 15, 2014 4:14 pm

Thanks Chrissy!

Do you ever use punctuation?

I really like this poem about a very simple image. i work a lot on paring
Words out. If this makes sense?
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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Fri Aug 15, 2014 4:35 pm

Surfnrg wrote:
Thanks Chrissy!

Do you ever use punctuation?

I really like this poem about a very simple image. i work a lot on paring
Words out. If this makes sense?

Honestly, I rarely use punctuation, unless im at work

I prefer to use decorative letters as if painting a picture with words/letters. I havnt done one of those that anyone cared about to my knowledge, but its my preference. Doing it online with these settings can be challenging. I like to write poems in a duo forms to where if read one way has one meaning and the other way has another. I'm not sure if anyone has ever picked up on that, because Ive only written a few of those over the years.

I should call them tangles.

But like I said, poetry had escaped me for years when I felt like writing it. Its been a while since I have, and I am grateful its slowly coming back. The desire that is.

When I wrote "hornet" it was like a spirit had come over me and given me a gift.

When I try, eh not so good. And I even know it but I still toss it out there because it is a thought to me that I may or may not go back to.

Scribbles on a page friend Smile

BTW. it is a honor for me that you like one of my poems. That means so much to me. Thank you for expressing it.
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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Sat Aug 16, 2014 7:43 am

Yes Chrissy painting a picture with words is what poetry is. Creating an image on paper from what you "see". I have never really tried to do a "tangle" as you word it but sometimes it just happens. In ode to a Grecian Urn Keats is simply describing an urn but clearly sees something else in the picture on it.
Here is where it gets really hard: it is in polishing the poem which starts out like a rough diamond.
Going back after writing it and editing upon editing to make sure it is just the way it should be.
That always takes a great deal longer than it did to write the original lines.....
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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Sat Aug 16, 2014 7:47 am

Punctuation is like the gas pedal on a car. With it you can accelerate or slow down or even stop the reader exactly where you want. I have one poem i worked on the punctuation for almost a year after the poem was "finished". Of course it wasn't finished until all the commas and periods were put in. Punctuation also changes the meaning as you want. This is just my opinion as poetry is very personal.
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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Sat Aug 16, 2014 9:19 am

Surfnrg wrote:
Punctuation is like the gas pedal on a car. With it you can accelerate or slow down or even stop the reader exactly where you want. I have one poem i worked on the punctuation for almost a year after the poem was "finished". Of course it wasn't finished until all the commas and periods were put in. Punctuation also changes the meaning as you want. This is just my opinion as poetry is very personal.

I have occasionally used a period or comma. Not often. I think I have only one poem on here that I used a extended period for pause..........

I guess I'm guilty of not appreciating the English language that I am using to create thee little bits of word art. English has never been my strong point. I know Yella always tried to get me to use a thesauruses to get me to expand my vocabulary. I did that a few years ago and enjoyed the results. That was way back, shoot we might have all still been on the PNJ back then. Although he had asked me to again recently.

I should listen to you both, about the punctuation and vocabulary. I appreciate you taking the time to offer me some tips.  Smile 

My next poem I will employ both those tools and see.
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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Sat Aug 16, 2014 9:57 am

Lilliputian Diamonds
Shifting under feet...
The aroma of salt drawn within,
wind to face, sun sinking in.
pommeling little pebbles of water,
gyrate on oily flesh.
Tantalizing the soul
Gush........
To dive in.......
Penetrating todays fatigue
Released passion
of salty sea.

Lilliputian Diamonds,
Linger at my feet.
Grainy as the days end,
of memories,
oceans deep.



OK, here's a try Surfnrg, also Yella if he is around.
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PostSubject: Re: The bad poetry thread by Chrissy   Thu Aug 21, 2014 9:38 pm

Purple little bubble
Floating by and by
Stick my finger on you
Poping in my eye
Squiggly little smiles
Darting to the sky
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